Spotlight on Oliver and Cullen

In Room 6 we have being looking at adding description to our writing. Today we looked at what adjectives and adverbs are. We also looked at similes and metaphors. I was really impressed with what the students came up with. Here are a couple of examples from Oliver and Cullen.

OLIVER:

One night there was a stormy night with rumbling lightning shooting across the sky like a bullet over the spooky haunted mansion with the lightning looking like blue veins in your body keeping the mansion alive and protected. And the door glowing like glowstone in the mansions heart.

CULLEN:

The old creepy house that nobody would enter sat up on top of the hill just sitting there making crackling noises and hearing screams from the house at night. Thunder was roaring and the lightning struck right by the house like if it was trying to guard the house.

Every night the house lights will turn on and at day they turn off wondering what would be doing that maybe the old family that lived there that passed away but didn't find their way to where they were meant to go and are stuck as ghost that are making weird noises as they fade away trying to say let me free. People complain about that house on the hill they say that they see all of the family that died their staring at them holding hands with disgusted and sad  faces as they all fade away with screams.